Kiana, ** When you post an assignment, be more specific about what you are posting. Your post should state your topic. For example, “Why I am Proud to be Canadian”. Your indenting is consistent, but use the “tab” button to indent. Some word choice and punctuation issues. Introduction: Good structure. Supporting Paragraphs: Very strong, stays on topic, and follows the same order as your introductory paragraph. Some excellent support for your opinions. Conclusion: Needs to restate your ideas. Your final sentence is strong. Overall, this is an excellent piece of expository writing. 22/25
Kiana,
ReplyDelete** When you post an assignment, be more specific about what you are posting. Your post should state your topic. For example, “Why I am Proud to be Canadian”.
Your indenting is consistent, but use the “tab” button to indent.
Some word choice and punctuation issues.
Introduction: Good structure.
Supporting Paragraphs: Very strong, stays on topic, and follows the same order as your introductory paragraph. Some excellent support for your opinions.
Conclusion: Needs to restate your ideas. Your final sentence is strong.
Overall, this is an excellent piece of expository writing.
22/25
Congrats, ex-band Member. I wish you could continue with band, ma'am but I understand that you have quit for "personal reasons." =)
ReplyDeletethanks odin
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